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1 point by blags66   10 months ago | View parent post

Pretty good, maybe switch around bubbles blowing around to blowing bubbles, it sounds awkward the way you have it to me. Other than that, it seems like these are the kind of things that most people will write about. Maybe include another thing that stands out from the rest of them?

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1 point by tribecca3   10 months ago

I will work on your suggestion.Thanks.

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